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Weekend Writing Warriors — NaNoWriMo Edition: GUN WITCH, Part 5

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Continuing along with another excerpt from Gun Witch.

After training for a bit, Monica exits her lair to enter the city.

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After a few minutes she donned a loose leather jacket and changed into her Nikes, grabbed her backpack and crossed to the other end of the warehouse, a private facility located in a nondescript corner of a nondescript work yard right at the edge of the business district, a place so drab it was amazing it had the nerve to appear on city maps. After one traveled a few blocks the industrial heartbeat of the city faded into downtown traffic horns, bagels and people angry they couldn’t get to where they didn’t want to be in a timely fashion. 

After she slid her HK45 into the back of her waistline and made sure it was covered with her coat Monica took a quick look around the wide open room, a workman’s loft made of concrete, brick and metal. A glance and a moment of concentration ensured her that her warding runes were in place, so she locked the door and crossed the yard.

The sun was out and bright but the air was frigid, largely on account of the wind. Monica’s eyes darted about behind her sunglasses, took in every corner of the wide road. That edge of town only had a few buildings, most of them quite old, and with the exception of the occasional rig come to take some rebar from the stockyard or an errant driver who’d mistakenly turned down Rampart instead of Broadmoor there was rarely any traffic. To the east the street faded into light trees rapidly gaining their fall color; to the west the roads narrowed and the buildings grew taller as they dissolved into Old Downtown.

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12 Comments

  1. Kim Magennis

    You had me at “a place so drab it was amazing it had the nerve to appear on city maps”.
    Excellent scene setting, Steven

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  2. Teresa Cypher

    “…people angry they couldn’t get to where they didn’t want to be …” You have such a gift, Steven. 🙂

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  3. Cara Bristol

    Good as always. You can paint a picture like nobody else. Loved the line: a place so drab it was amazing it had the nerve to appear on city maps.

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  4. Christina Ochs

    I can picture this place exactly! I might even have been in the passenger seat of one of those lost trucks. 🙂

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  5. Stephanie Ingram

    Awesome description. You really do have a gift. Your snippets are enjoyable to read. I already can’t wait for the next one.

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  6. veronicascott

    I LOVE that whole first paragraph. The wording is amazing. I was especially taken by the line about people not being able to get to where they didn’t want to be! In the second paragraph, I’d just watch out for the phrasing about Monica’s eyes, which kinda implies they have a life of their own, you know? I always enjoy your snippets!

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  7. Jenna Jaxon

    Really excellent descriptions. The favorites, of course, are the ones about “a place so drab” and “people angry they couldn’t get to where they didn’t want to be.” They exactly set the tone for the world you’re creating. Grand snippet!

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  8. Steven

    Thanks so much, everyone! =D

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  9. Ed Hoornaert

    Great description. I love that you threw bagels into the middle of your list of traffic and angry people. The incongruity was delightful.

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  10. jessicahanna

    I love your description here. “A place so drab it was amazing it had the nerve to appear on city maps.” That just pulled me right in. Nice work.

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  11. Amalie

    Brilliant descriptions! Loving it! 🙂

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