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Weekend Writing Warriors: GUN WITCH, Part 7

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Just when you try to get back on track with Weekend Writing Warriors, you have family visit from out-of-town and find yourself kayaking and hiking all weekend… ;D

Back to Gun Witch, Book 1 of the “Tooth & Claw” series, a paranormal adventure about the movers and shakers in Earth’s extensive supernatural criminal underworld.

Monica King, a young witch, has dreamed of being murdered by the foul creatures called the Scaravae (the origin of our modern tales of both vampires and werewolves) ever since she was a little girl.  A child of the streets who’s trained herself in the arts of magic and combat, Monica is finally ready to take the fight to the enemy, but though she’s used to working alone she’s going to need some help.  Last week she met with a mysterious contact, Dillon, whom she needs a favor from.  In the last excerpt, Monica cut straight to the chase, but Dillon, it seems, wants to talk.

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“You can ask me how I’m doing,” he said, “or what I’ve been up to…why I was late…”

The owner brought his mocha to the table, flashed them both a smile and asked if they needed anything, but Monica politely told her no, then waited until she was out of earshot before speaking to Dillon again.

“If we ever spend time together in a situation when I’m not already focused on something I have to do, I assure you, Dillon, I will ask you every mundane and cliched question imaginable.” She looked at the duffel bag, and smiled. “Now, however…”

“Sorry, I forgot, you’re not really the social type,” he said, and he took a sip from his drink and looked over at the newspaper bin.

“Well?” she demanded, her arms crossed.

“We’re set,” he said, “just let me enjoy my coffee, and when I go, I’ll leave the bag.”

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Thanks for stopping by, and have a great weekend!

15 Comments

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject

    I love how you illustrate their differing personalities in this snippet. Well done!

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  2. Ed Hoornaert

    You’ve done a good job of showing two people with very different agendas.

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    • Steven

      More different than you might even guess, at this point. ;D Thanks Ed!

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  3. amybraunauthor

    I love their conflicting personalities. Great snippet! 😀

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  4. Kate Bigel

    nice distinct voices of the characters. I would have liked some sensory feedback when the coffee is placed on the table. Right? They fall silent because they can’t talk in front of someone and then the waiter puts the coffee on the table.
    Nice drive to the dialog because I am sitting here thinking “and then what…” – you hooked me in 10 sentences. Awesome.

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    • Steven

      Thanks, Kate!

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  5. veronicascott

    I have a feeling each is effective in their own way but the contrast is fun. I can feel the steam rising from her ears! Great snippet…

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    • Steven

      Thanks Veronica!

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  6. Christina Ochs

    He’s way too relaxed for her, or she’s too uptight for him. Maybe both. 🙂 Great snippet!

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    • Steven

      Thanks Christina!

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  7. Teresa Cypher

    Outstanding character building, Steven! I really like him and how he’s not afraid to say it like he feels it. Bravo! 😉

    And WHY are they leaving the duffel bag????? What is in it???

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    • Steven

      Thanks, Teresa! He’s leaving the duffel bag for her to take, and it’s full of…well, nasty surprises. ;D

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