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Weekend Writing Warriors: THE BLACK TOWER

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More from THE BLACK TOWER.  And some minor spoiler alert.

Fallen Knight Azander Dane has a dark past.  The order he once belonged to, the Dawn Knights, were declared outlaws after they seemingly took it upon themselves to round up and execute hundreds of Bloodspeakers (a type of mage most believe are naturally evil) in a number of death camps hidden deep in the Razortooth Mountains.  Most of the Dawn Knights are dead now, killed during the infighting that occurred in the aftermath of the mass slayings (when Dane and a few others led a revolt against the commander of their order), while others were later hunted down and executed by agents of the same Empire that had secretly ordered them to carry out their foul deeds.

Dane has been living with his crimes ever since.

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Dane waited, alone and in the dark.

Over the course of his cursed life he’d been many things, few of them good. He wondered what the One Goddess would think of him if he stood before the gates of heaven now, his soul measured, weighed on the scales of deeds. He looked back at the events of his life, at all of the dreams hed left unfulfilled and the people he’d killed. He looked at the young boy he’d once been, and the monster he’d become. And though he’d spent the last few weeks trying to redeem himself he knew that would never happen. He saw through the human skin now, saw the beast underneath.

Everything he’d ever hoped and lived for had been crushed in those camps: no matter what else he did or what else he might become, he would always be one of those mad knights who’d slaughtered people in the mountains.  

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18 Comments

  1. Danielle @ Consuming Worlds

    Poor Dane, such a bleak look on his future. I hope he can find hope again. I know you are sneaky like that….

    I love Dane. And even if he doesn’t have hope, I do. I will keep hope for this tortured soul.

    Another great look and teaser.

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    • Steven

      Thanks, Danielle. Dane has been a very interesting character to write.

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  2. Teresa Cypher

    Wow, you’re ripping out my heart. A great job of giving the reader a tortured soul…and we will judge him. Your prose is beautiful, Steven. I love this snippet!

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    • Steven

      Thanks so much, Teresa!

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  3. burnsmillie

    Such an excellent snippet here. I don’t know this guy yet, but I’m already in his corner. Excellent eight.

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    • Steven

      Thanks Millie!

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  4. Botanist

    Sounds like he’s trapped in a twisted web of deception. That he realizes his situation tells me his heart’s in the right place, though, so there must be some hope for him.

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    • Steven

      Dane is the last person who’ll ever see good in himself, which is ironic because over the course of the novels he performs heroic deed after heroic deed, but he’s so fixated on what he’s done he has trouble seeing any of the good he’s done.

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  5. veronicascott

    Poignant, the way he looks back at the child he once was…makes his adult life even more stark. A very effective excerpt, love your writing! And I want to read more of course!

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    • Steven

      Thanks Veronica!

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  6. Lorien Lyn

    Nicely done in giving us a dark, tortured hero with three-dimensional characterization. Great snippet!

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    • Steven

      Thanks, Lorien, I appreciate it!

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  7. Cara Bristol

    Powerful analysis here.I often do look at people who have committed atrocities or just gone astray and wonder, what happened? That person was somebody’s little boy once.

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    • Steven

      I agree, Cara. And as far as he’s fallen, Dane understands the horror of the things he’s done. Redemption may not be realistic, but he still cares enough about the world to try and make it a better place in light of what he did to make it a worse one.

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  8. thepaperbutterfly

    I really enjoyed this 😀 I love the metaphor about heaven and a scale. I had actually read that before from another author, and I loved it when she did it too. I like the fact that the Dane is introspective. It makes it much easier to connect with him. Rarely is any side all good or all bad in any conflict.

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  9. Lisa Medley, Author

    I soooo dig a tortured hero and the darker the better. 😀 Dane is just my type. Well done!!! Definitely interested in more!

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    • Steven

      Thanks Lisa! =D

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